assassin
There once were two brothers. One of them was a successful business man while the other was barely making it by, paycheck to paycheck. One day while visiting the office building his brother works in looking for a job he stopped by to see his brother in his office. When he opened the door to the office he saw a man sitting there doing paper work that was not his brother. He has asked, “Who are you?”
The man relied “I am your brother luck.”
Then the brother asked, “If you are my brother luck, what
are you doing here?”
He responded, “I do your brother harder paper work to keep
him ahead in the game of business.”
The brother thought a moment then ask, “Where his luck was?”
To this he responded, “He is resting in a hotel.”
The man demanded to know where the hotel was, and the luck
told him where the hotel was. The brother set off to find his luck. On his way
he cam across a man crying. He inquired why the man was crying. The man
explained that he did not have enough money to open his business. So the
brother told the man once he finds his luck he will ask a way to get the money.
Next the brother came across a chef siting in front of his restaurant
looking sad. He asked the chef why he was sad. The chef replied that he had not
had a customer in many days. Thinking about this the brother said he would inquire
his luck on why this was.
Along the way the brother saw a man in a black suit. He looked
frustrated and the brother asked why? The man explained his assassin’s business
was not taking off. To this the brother responded I will ask my luck for you.
Finally, he found the hotel and entered to find his luck
sleeping on a couch. He woke his luck. He asked why he was not with him and it
replied that he was not to wake for a few more years. The luck asked him to
leave until then, but the brother wouldn’t until he answered his questions about
the situation of the men he met along the way.
To this the luck responded, “For the man who wants a business
tell him to get a loan. For the chef, tell him to make food people like not
just food that he liked. Finally, for the assassin, tell him to take a contract
out on a fool to gain credit.”
After hearing these answers, the brother left his luck. First,
he inquires the man who wanted to open a business. He told him to get a loan
from a bank. The man thanked the brother and asked if he would be his partner,
but the brother declined for he had answers for others.
Next the brother visited the chef. He told the chef to make
food for the people not just his own likings. To this the chef responded
fondly. The chef asked the brother if he wanted to be his personal food taster
and the brother declined for he had one more answer to deliver.
Finally, the brother found the assassin. He told the assassin
to take a contract out on a fool. To this the assassin asked for the brother to
sign a contract. The brother did this without reading it.
Later that night the assassin killed the brother while he slept
with a snipper. The brother died.
Author notes: the original story a poor brother set out for
his luck after speaking to his rich brothers’ luck. He ran across several
people and told them he would ask his luck what to do in their situations. He found
his luck and it responded to each situation. Then he went to each person with
the answer and they all offered half their rewards for the answers, but he foolishly
declined them. Finally, he answered a wolfs question and the wolf tricked him
for he was a fool and ate him. Very odd story and that why I wanted to rewrite
it.
bibliography: source story and author: The Man Who Went to Wake His Luck translated by D.L.R. Lorimer and E.O. Lorimer
Hi Nicholas!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story. It was very different and interesting to read. The author’s notes definitely helped to see where the story was going. I like the way that you took your own narrative for the story. It was similar to the original, but had its own spin! I also like the picture that you included in this story. It set up a general idea and theme as to what the story would be about.
Hi Nick!
ReplyDeleteI like how you adapted the story to a more modern setting. I wasn't expecting that twist at the end! I feel bad for the poor brother- if only his luck had gotten up that day, he might not have been assassinated. I like how you represented the wolf as an assassin- it's rare in modern life that someone would run into a wolf, but quite reasonable that he would run into an assassin.
Hey nick,
ReplyDeleteI read this story as well and I think that this is an interesting way of modernizing the story. The business man, the chef and the assassin are interesting translations into modern times from the baker, the farmer, and the wolf (I think those were the original characters). If you end up adding this to your portfolio, I think it might be a good idea to add in that the business of the first man and the restaurant of the second one did well, otherwise the fool is just turning down uncertain odds which makes him less of a fool.
-Cat
Hey Nick,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your story about the two brothers. I like all the changes you made to the characters and story. I agree that the modern take on the story is interesting and done thoughtfully. I think you started and ended your story well, hooking the reader in the beginning and then having a dramatic ending. Something that might help other readers is to separate your paragraphs and maybe make the font a little bigger. I have bad eyes, so maybe I'm the only one struggling lol.
Great job!
Madi